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If anyone knows how to clean up this page with my name, please help. I'm not very good at this. Thanks in advance. -DLNorton -- 20:05, 19 January 2007 (UTC)

Please see Help:Furry_Book_of_Style for the proper ways to wikify your entry. Taking down the "clean-up" tags without clean-up is not one of them Spirou 20:11, 19 January 2007 (UTC)
Anyone with Wiki expertise is more than welcome to give a hand at cleaning up and wikifying my page. Actually, I'd like to see what someone else can do to it. --DLNorton 21:08, 19 January 2007 (UTC)
WOW! That was quick! Knocked out my edits!! But it's now starting to look a little more tightened up! Though some of it got deleted completely. I'm not complaining!! I was just suprised! :-)--DLNorton 21:29, 19 January 2007 (UTC)

Opening paragraph[edit]

I think we should avoid one sentence opening sections. As a former journalism major, I know that you've got to grab the audience right away so they know the rest of the article is worth reading. Maybe more than DL Norton is a cartoonist. It's about as useful as if it were just a stub. Ideas?--Kendricks Redtail 00:17, 20 January 2007 (UTC)

France, Father and airman: The way you rewrote, it reads as they moved back because his father was in the USAF, instead of him being born in France because his Father was there serving as an airman,... and about airman; That's an all encompassing term to describe anybody serving in USAF, from recruit to officer, same as "sailor" (USN,) or "soldier" (Army,)... Changed the verb tense on the first added paragraph, as some of those zines and comics were published looong time ago (8/10 years) Spirou 01:18, 20 January 2007 (UTC)
Granted, but airman is also a rank, as is seaman for Navy and private for Army. And even in the general term, it still only describes enlisted. Do we know if Pops was enlisted or officer? I'm just trying to broaden the stroke as much as possible to cover all bases until we figure it out. Because you wouldn't call a Navy lieutenant a sailor, would you?--Kendricks Redtail 01:34, 20 January 2007 (UTC)
Yes, I would, in certain circumstances, when I served in the service: "Lieutenant Rodriguez is a Navy sailor serving as interim WEPS on the USS,..."/"His uncle was a sailor, serving with the rank Captain during,..."
And when we referred to the USAF personnel that were testing some gear onboard one of the ships I served on (And that included their officers,) we called them "airman,"... These "airman" were deployed with us "sailors" onboard our ship, which also had hosted "marines," "soldiers," and Coasties Coast Guard sailors,...
"And even in the general term, it still only describes enlisted." No, wrong,... It's a rank, but it's also a way to describe USAF military personnel. Just one more example: The USAF's version of our "Bluejackets Manual" (the US Navy's "bible",) is called "The Airman's Guide." Just FYI Spirou 02:19, 20 January 2007 (UTC)
Bluejacket is slang for E-6 and below, don't you remember? Officers got their own manual IIRC. Hell, they got their own reading list. I just couldn't see some officers going for being categorized with the enlisted. With the Navy, for example, you've got SWOs, blackshoes, mustangs, pilots, etc, etc, but I wouldn't call a single one of them sailor unless they'd taken their commission as an enlisted. Or if they were Commander Kitsune. Or NCOs for that matter. I'm going to accept your airman covering all of enlisted, but I don't think you'd call an officer such. I could check. --Kendricks Redtail 02:28, 20 January 2007 (UTC)
Hey thanks guys!! This is really looking awsome!! I can't thank you all enough!! It's tighter, and better to read. I'm no English grammar major, but this is good! I should put something into the Blazin' Charlotte link and perhaps someone could tweak that around..? ;-) I also have other open links it I guess one thing at a time. Thanks again!! --DLNorton 10:49, 20 January 2007 (UTC)